Picking Apart My Breakdown

The topic of this writing piece was to capture a vivid memory from over a year ago where were not going through the best of times. The version posted is a very slightly altered version of what I wrote in class. I chose to go with the night I had a pile of homework up to my ears due at the end of the week. I had to complete all of the work while also having to be a manager at my job. I found this writing piece quite difficult because I’m not one to be open about any personal incidents. Even with feeling free to write what I wish, I was still vague with my feelings from that night. I have no issue explaining the scene or how others felt around me but talking about myself is something I’m not used too. To some this may not be seen as an issue but I feel that you should be connected with your writing. While I do strive to be interested in my writings, I rarely become emotionally attached. In my opinion, when a connection is made, the piece becomes more genuine and honest for the readers. This problem of mine is similar to how vague my writing can be which is explained in more depth with my final writing piece. Also, I have the tendency to be choppy with my writing. In the piece I jump from one situation from the other. For example, I go from briefly explaining my general problem to quickly jumping to everyone’s thoughts about me. It is difficult for me to blend ideas together to provide an easy transition. Although I wish I could open up more about exactly what I felt that night, I do not mind how my overall description of the night came out.